Randy’s essay has an abrupt start to the introduction paragraph. However he did summarize the details he would touch on later in the body paragraphs. Furthermore for every paragraph he rebutted the arguments to his stand thus supporting his stand. A lot of statistical facts have been supported with references.
However this essay is very technical, and does not touch on social or political views so it’s rather monotonous. I feel that randy can improve on his continuity and unity as some sentences do not link smoothly. Other than these his essay is fine. He touched on the points that the question is looking for and went on further to give arguments which he rebutted on to support his stand.
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